Olmas's Player:

I'm glad you've returned. Your character looks fine although there are several things you must address. GM Ariel Skye reserves the right to not approve min-max characters, and your character's exceptional dexterity score poses a big problem... If you were to fashion the penultimate archer or rogue, a 20 dex may be more understandable. As a wizard, a very high intelligence is fine but a 20 dex is much harder to accept. I don't want to try to pass this over on GM Ariel Skye. Also, your character as an elf gains automatic proficiency with a longsword and longbow if you want to acquire them. Please provide me with your list of memorized spells.

Remember that you play an Elf and a Wizard. Generally, elves possess a different outlook from humans and act very differently from humans and other races, and Wizards generally don't act like warriors. If your character is different from other elves and other wizards, you need to explain. This leads me to my next point.

I need more meat to your character's history and physical description. If you had to describe your character's personality to a friend who knows nothing about elves or wizards, how would you describe him? The background you have doesn't fit how you play him. Think about how you want to play the character and then create a background that is reflective. I read these things and take them into account. Think about these things and write it down.

If you had to help a police sketch artist who knows nothing about elves draw a picture of your character, how would you describe Olmas? Generally, the more popular subraces are high, gray and wood elves. Each is a little different from the others. Play-by-post is a game of words and you need to convey your character's appearance to us in words. Think about this and write it down.

The easiest way to make the changes to the character is to delete and recreate the character sheet in the PZ Program. Since Olmas hasn't been awarded any treasure or experience, this is no big deal. Address these issues and we'll be ready to roll.

:)